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Minjung1 Byun Min-Jung Prof. Kyle Brebner IERW (04) 03 October 2015 Korean government should welcome more Syrians into the country. Prior to writing my essay about ‘what do you think of welcoming Syrian refugees’, I want to tell you about ‘The Syrian civil war’. Because of the long-term seizure of power by one man, Syria people were beginning to exclaim democratization. At first people were calmly and peacefully. However the government pressured powerfully, people got angry so the scale became bigger than before. Eventually the fight became government verses anti-government. Government was Shi`ah religion and anti-government was Sunni religion. Their different religions made big problem. In Middle East, religion is so important that people can die because of religion. At last joining with neighboring countries, the civil war became on a large scale. Participating Russia, China and The United State, all of the Syrian territory became battlefield. So many Syrians left their country to live and became refugees. I think Korea should accept Syrians as a refugees and care for them. Many people think that if we accept them as refugees, we would suffer many negative effects such as problems of economy and safety. For example, if they come to Korea and one Syrian gets a job, it means one Korean has lost a job. Also many people are worried about IS. If IS come to Korea, it must be dangerous in Korea society. Last, many Koreans are afraid of losing ethnicity if government accepts refugees. But I think it’s our duty to accept them as a refugee and care for them. Do you know when Korea has The Korean War? That time many countries around the world saved Korea for example many missionaries taught Korean students and many people in other countries gave support to variety of food and basic necessities. I think it is our duty to help the country which is in a difficult situation. This will be the first step to a world peace. And if we accept refugees, it is obvious that we can increase diplomatic and international presence in East Asia. For example, consider the case of Qatar. Qatar has started the refugee support faster than Saudi Arabia. Through this aspect, they established a reputation in the world. Last if Syria has change of government, many Syrians who are living in Korea and cared by Korean government, they will return to their country Syria. And someday if Syria and Korea have a treaty such as economic or cultural things, it will have positive effects. Except for cultural and economical advantages, it will also have many advantages. A few weeks ago, there was one photo on the news. This was a Syrian refugee 3-year-old boy lying dead on the beach. While he went to refuge with his mother and brother, he was drowned. And this photo made everyone cry. Nobody asked about his death. Everyone knows that the war made him die. Include this child, many children are placed in danger of death before opening their dreams. Now we are the one world. So we must help them actively.